Searing Waves

He walked away from the fire.

Head down, shoulders heavy with the loss he’d just suffered –

the sight of his friend engulfed by the will of the almighty ocean

imprinted on his mind with a whirling slap.

He had tried his best to rescue him,

but when he dove in,

it was already too late.


His lungs lacked the oxygen he would have needed to head deeper,

and his friend’s were already filled with a lethal dose

of salty draught he could never recover from.


Back on the shore, his dripping limbs felt shattered.

Heart pierced by the hailing sound of the ocean,

he looked absent, torn between worlds.


Eyes locked to the ground, feet entwined with the path

he had yet to walk, he held on to life’s rope, with all the strength he had left,

and thought of the souls that breathed still.


He then turned around and bowed his head to the sea,

bidding farewell to a dear hand whose shared memories

reached inside his broken chest in one final call.


Sore bones breached from within,

he stepped forward leaving behind

part of his soul to journey along

with the spirit of the sudden departed.


26 Comments Add yours

  1. A sad story told in your gorgeous words. The last two lines especially so, the soul, not in a religious sense but that inner part of a person that defines who they truely are, being torn by the tragedy just sums up the boy’s horror and pain beautifully.
    It happens every summer here, although it usually ends even more tragically with the boy jumping in to rescue his friend also drowning in his attempts. It’s even more frightening after watching my own friend get dragged away by currents in the calmest seas I’ve ever seen just last weekend. He was fine and managed to get back to the coast eventually but it could have been a lot worse.

    Glad you got some time to write. I hope you get more chances soon, for both our sakes 💗😄. I’m still waiting for the end of a certain ‘short’ story 😄.

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    1. I am so sorry to hear about your friend. You must have been so worried and it happened and relieved of an indescribable type of relief when he made it out. We hang on to life tightly but it is way more fragile than we foresee. Sight of relief shared here at the thought of your friend.

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    2. Thank you for your lovely words and thoughtful comment Dreamwalker. I am glad to see you are still asking for more.

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      1. It will take something truely drastic for me to not look forward to your next creation. I’d say I’ll always get that wave of giddiness when I see you’ve posted something ☺️

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        1. You’re sweet ❤ Thank you for your enthusiasm. It made me smile of a giant smile 🙂

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          1. Glad I could help 😉. Enjoy your beautiful smile 🙂

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  2. Diana says:

    Ah, welcome back to your home of words my dear B ❤
    "a lethal dose of salty draught' is the type of worded pearls you bestow so easily and I have missed. This is tragically beautiful and stays with me long after the sorrowful sound of the sea fades….

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    1. Thank you my D ❤️ I am happy to get a few moments to write again too. It feels wonderful as always to be creative. I just wish time was more generous with its infinite stretching so that I would never have to take a break.
      Thank you again for your lovely words. Reading you always warms my heart ❤️ 😘


  3. Brilliant writing, so expressive, emotional and well worded.
    Love the twist of them having left a part of themselves in the ocean as opposed to the presumed dead friend, great twist!

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    1. Cheers, Fionn! I always love to read your comments. You never fail to put a smile upon my face. Thank you for appreciating my words 😊


  4. Neha Sharma says:

    Very well-written and really moving! Loved it 🙂


    1. Thank you, Neha! I am delighted to hear that you loved it 🤗 Thank you again for your lovely feedback.

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      1. Neha Sharma says:

        You’re welcome 🙂


  5. Triste, mais si bien écrit!


    1. C’est étrange comme on trouve toujours tant de beauté dans la tristesse. Merci pour ce gentil commentaire 😊

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  6. Ritwik says:

    Should I say its lovely because its emotional; I’m at loss of words, how tragically beautiful this piece is!! Amazing…


    1. Thank you so much for this lovely comment Ritwik ❤ My heart is smiling at the generosity of your genuine comment.


      1. Ritwik says:

        Thank you for such lovely reply!!

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        1. Anytime! It was my pleasure to read your heartfelt comment. I am a big fan of those. 🙂


          1. Ritwik says:

            Great deserves true appreciation!!

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          2. Wow! More compliments coming my way. You are very kind. Thank you again 🙂


          3. Ritwik says:

            My pleasure!! Keep up the great work!!

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          4. I will 🙂 Right back at you. I checked out your blog and thought I could learn a few new words now and then. Great idea 🙂


          5. Ritwik says:

            Haha…thanks for reciprocating the love!!
            Hope to see you use a few words then…

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          6. Very likely so, Sir 🙂 I like to expand my vocabulary.


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