Once upon a dream
Tainted ties and lulling lies
Torn up on the seam
Broken lines, and bitter eyes
Once upon a dream you were
Cast upon a time you were
A spell that filled me in you were
A curse that dried me out you were
A gift I could not part you were
A thrill that skinned me raw you were
A high with so much low you were
A hit I had to blow you were
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A lie I had to out you were
A scream I had to shout you were
A string that pulled me down you were
A tease without a bound you were
A drink I couldn’t down you were
A King without a crown you were
A siren with no sound you were
A kingdom without grounds you were
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A house outside four walls you were
A tear up on a cheek you were
A tear on my fabric you were
A door without a lock you were
An eye lost out of sight you were
A breath slipping a mouth you were
A hand that pulled me close you were
A chest that heaved and blew you were
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A hole under my breast you were
A weight up on my plate you were
A scar I had to hide you were
A spill looming behind you were
***
Hey my lovely friends, and beautiful artists out there,
Here is another song I wrote. I tried my hand at rap verses, which I inserted in an acoustic song structure.
I look forward to reading your comments ❤
Love to you all,
Always
© Hailie
Featured image: Tinted Lake, Lake Geneva, Thonon Les Bains, January 9th, 2016, captured with an iPhone 5C.
An absolutely beautiful song ❤. The melody is intoxicating, the lyrics are your usual musical artistry and your unique style continues to grow, always complimenting your voice beautifully.
The rap verses even carry your own mark, absolutely amazing if this is just you trying to practice 😉. Your voice softens your words as they flow but there’s still just enough articulation for it all to be comprehensible. It gives them a beautiful, almost playful, tone. I want to hear more of your experimentation now 🙂.
Oh, and did I mention it’s beautiful 😅
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❤ Oh how happy that comment makes me ❤ I am ecstatic you like it that much.
It is just me trying to create. It is only a first draft. I had the rhythm of the verse and the melody of the chorus and I just went for it and recorded it. I wish I had more time to practice and make it sound better, but the wait would be too long. Besides, I like sharing first drafts. The raw emotion there is always stronger. When you repeat it over and over again, the voice is more asserted, the musical quality and words intelligibility improve, but you lose the magic of that first instant of creation. Thank you for calling it beautiful ❤ Did I mention I am feeling ecstatic upon reading that?
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I completely agree, keep sharing all the first drafts. I won’t have to wait so long either that way 😉. Your ability to send emotions across time and space is astounding, it makes all your artistry special. Everything you write is filled to bursting with your heart and soul. Hearing that in your voice is beautiful (okay, even my phone is predicting me at this point 😅). There’s a love and amazement in you that is engrained in your voice from that “magical instant of creation” that I would never give up. First drafts are the best ❤️
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I am delighted you approve with such intensity 🙂 I am not about to stop writing stories and music alike, nor sharing it. It is part of me. It makes me too happy to stop. Clearly addicted. Addicted to your feedback too 😉 Hugs Dream Walker! And thanks for your renewed interest ❤
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Haha, I was never afraid that you would 😉. Your’s is definitely a healthy addiction, for everybody around you too 😄.
Hugs, ma belle Soul Writer. My interest isn’t going anywhere 💕
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How lovely to hear that ❤ I will keep counting on you then 😉
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I agree with the Irishdreamwalker, all his comments are spot-on. and yes a lot better recording this time, guitar is quieter and your voice is more audible, but as he said, your voice is soft, you seem to be concentrating on your guitar playing more, rather than your lovely singing voice. Well done Hailie. xx
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Thanks for listening Ivor 💕
I did make sure my phone was closer to my mouth than to my guitar. It was my first time singing it fully, I was concentrated on everything at once. 😅😂 singing and playing at the same time and bringing life to words at the same time… is always a lot to handle. Doing my best with that! Thanks for your feedback my sweet friend! I appreciate it, always ❤️
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You’re so very talented, and your words were beautiful, and you did excellently. And yes I could feel you concentrating, what a bundle of tasks for you to handle all at once. Have you another phone or computer, record your guitar music, then have it playing while you’re singing and record it all again, hope you understand what I’m trying to say. Best of luck. xx
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Thank you my Ivor ❤ for always being there and for thinking so highly of me. Considering how talented you are yourself, a compliment from you means a lot.
I understand perfectly what you are saying.
I need to practice and learn how to do it all at once as naturally as possible. If I separated the tasks momentarily it would only act as a temporary bandaid. Besides when I create, my guitar and my voice guide each other too. I think what I need mostly is more time to practice ^^ and improve. However if I were to record it in a studio or something, that's probably what I'd have to do.
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Haha, practice makes perfect… and I’ll always be here, to listen and observe your improvement as your talent, progresses and expands.. xx
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I will keep practicing then ❤️ thanks for being there! Xx
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Always my pleasure.
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🌏🌺💚
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Haha, thanks for agreeing. It means I’m not completely crazy yet at least 😄
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Haha, we’re all crazy in our own strange ways, but thankfully not completely….Yet !!
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soulful voice and beautiful haunting words Hailie, how well you write and sing this tat one person can have such an effect on our psyche. i see contradictions and absolutions to make excuses even, for something we want to hold on to but kknow its venom. always a treat to listen to you my dear
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Thank you my Lovely Gina 🤗❤️ I am glad my words always speak to you so deeply. I am happy with the way this song sounds too, the guitar intro plunges you in a meditative state and then I start singing and softly rapping. Toxic relationships can be rough to handle, especially when you are like you tend to see the good in people and remember the beautiful moments.
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Wow! Do I have to say more? Wow
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Thank you, M! Sorry I just saw you comment a minute ago. I hope you are doing well.
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Indeed, I am doing great. How are you doing?
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Great too! Resting this weekend finally!
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That is great!!! Aside from resting from teaching (for a minute lol) how are you feeling?
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Creative 🙂 been writing today
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That is fantastic, I will be checking your blog in a little while.
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I haven’t been publishing though 💔 not ready to share the story I am working on until it is printed on paperback 😉
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Ah!!! A surprise, I like that. How are you today?
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I am very good and you? It was a beautiful day here. I went for a mind cleansing run. It felt wonderful! How was your day?
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That sounds amazing. I am doing good, getting ready to write and then read a little bit. I am so happy your day was amazing
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I missed your delightful work.
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Thank you so much my delightful friend! I am here as often as I can but my teacher’s life is keeping me very very busy!
Ps: I miss reading yours too! I will pay you a visit shortly! ❤️😘
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A drink I couldn’t down you were
A King without a crown you were
A siren with no sound you were
A kingdom without grounds you were
Enjoyed it all (and listened 🙂 ) Those four bars stood out, but the entire theme is clever and works perfectly on the subject matter
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Thank you Fionn! It was written in one go, poured out of me a little playfully. I wanted to experiment out of my comfort zone both with the lyrics and the rap. I am so very happy to hear you feedback – positive feedback at that. Thank you again 😊 I hope you are having a lovely Easter weekend up there in Scotland.
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One take magic 🙂
All good here, cheers, likewise i hope.
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Don’t you love it when it happens?
Yes, thank you 😊 all good here too!
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